drothgery wrote:I've got lots of unfinished fanfic and a few barely-started original stories, but I did just finish one in our humble host's universe that could probably use some reviews. If anyone wants to take a look, it's here: https://www.fanfiction.net/s/10209025/1/Bridge-BuildingMichael Everett wrote:The reason for the brackets is that on this site, we have one of the best Sci-fi writers deigning to speak with us lowly mortals.
Yup, the Mad Wizard Weber (aka Runsforcelery) himself.
My query is this.
Are there any other writers here?
I myself tend to dabble mainly in fanfic and have my own page but I have written and posted one original story, although it does rather brutally highlight my literary limitations.
So, are there any others here who have entered the realms of literature (fanfic or other)?
And are they willing to let us see their works (with the risk of laughter)?
I'll point out a quick critique since I'm working. Don't start with a word like "uninteresting," because it will transmute disinterest to your story. If you are talking about an uninteresting or dull something in your first lines/paragraph, your reader is going to assume your story isn't interesting and move on.
You need to grab your audience somehow. I would also be wary of front-loading too many details into your opening paragraph. Spread it out a bit. I don't need to know what the name of the system, ship, captian, planet, and so on right off the bat. Treat it like a presentation; present it gradually instead of blasting all the details out at once.
I'll give a more in-depth critique once I get off. It's not bad, other than that.