I'm not sure who, if anyone, actually edited this book for continuity or to see if it makes sense, but it doesn't look like it.
Yana who has been following Victor and Anton, from Mesa to Parmley to Haven to Manticore and now they want her to go back to Mesa with them, so we then get this...
“It’s worth a try,” said Victor. “If we want Yana, we’ll need to send a courier to Parmley Station anyway. We can ask Steph to come back with her. For reasons unspecified, of course—"
But she's been with you, complaining of how bored she is the whole time... Did she leave her favorite gun?
Speaking of Steph, they jump through hoops to get her to return with Mesa to help them, and she disappears from the book. You spent entire chapters on people talking about how to get her return and convincing her to return and then she isn't in the book anymore? Just padding the book to make it longer?
I don't know if it's just the eBook version, but whomever set the type for the Cast of Characters needs to be fired.
For example:
Jeremy X: Secretary of War of the Kingdom
of Torch; formerly head of the
Audubon Ballroom, the ex-slave
guerrilla force considered by some people to be a terrorist organization.
and
Zilwicki, Berry: Queen of Torch; adopted daughter of Anton Zilwicki.
Zilwicki, Lars: Brother of Berry.
Snorrason, Hjálmar: Lieutenant Commander, Solarian League Navy; CO, DD SLNS Napoleon. Also CO DD Division 3029.1.
It then continues on with characters from ToF through the Zilwicki's again.
I would be really embarrassed to have my name associated with this book.
They save the three remaining people from their last visit, and they disappear from the rest of the book.
This entire book should have been a half dozen chapters in another book.
I want my SPACE OPERA back.